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Transformers Acres
03:31:35 Geek, Eek
My spotify traumatized me. :(
Wolf Dancer
03:31:28 Wolf Burger (Leg)
KPH
xD I'm so excited to learn from him!
KPH Equestrian
03:30:48 Rapcoon | Jester
awww<3
he seems delightful, I love his lil description lol
Wolf Dancer
03:26:58 Wolf Burger (Leg)
He's more filled out/muscular lol
Wolf Dancer
03:26:23 Wolf Burger (Leg)
KPH
Yup! Except he looks more chunky since that photo lol
KPH Equestrian
03:25:36 Rapcoon | Jester
wilf
xD
Cedar? He's so stinking cute omg
Wolf Dancer
03:24:19 Wolf Burger (Leg)
KPH
xD That's why he put me through a test xD Last week he stepped on my boots twice would shift his weight onto and look at me to see how I would react xD He's fun! I know he'll be really great! And here 3rd horse down! -Click-
KPH Equestrian
03:21:39 Rapcoon | Jester
well the smart ones are more fun, they keep you on your toes xD
KPH Equestrian
03:21:00 Rapcoon | Jester
wilf
omg my mother has a video of me when I was 4 trying to get on our shetland pony bareback... I failed and he did that exact thing🀦‍β™€οΈπŸ˜‚
Wolf Dancer
03:20:22 Wolf Burger (Leg)
He's very smart, and playful xD He's a little too smart for his own good xD
KPH Equestrian
03:20:14 Rapcoon | Jester
wilf
oh yay! I'm gonna need pics of himπŸ‘€πŸ˜…
Wolf Dancer
03:19:57 Wolf Burger (Leg)
I was just grooming him before tacking and he just reached over and bit my butt for no reason then looked at me like he didn't do it xD
Minerva
03:19:53 Min
Easiest way is to breed her to another apricot, but anything with at least one e extension gene (ideally chestnut base- ee), at least one Prl gene and 1 or 0 cream genes
Wolf Dancer
03:19:15 Wolf Burger (Leg)
KPH
I also will be able to go out 3 days a week to work with him! I'm so excited about this! He's so stubborn and I love it! Except for the part where he bit me on the butt xD
KPH Equestrian
03:18:23 Rapcoon | Jester
oh wilf that's so exciting!! 😁
Thornwood Manor
03:16:56 
What do I need to get another apricot from her?
-HEE Click-
Wolf Dancer
03:14:50 Wolf Burger (Leg)
KPH
You know the mustang I'm working with? He did a lot better with me today! I didn't have to use the crop, and he gave into the trot/canter more willingly! He only crow hopped a couple of times, which was much better than the last time I rode him! I think I passed the testing stage with him and we have started a relationship! I'm super excited we have so much to learn from each other!
Nightingales Ridge
03:14:18 
OK cool beans thank you!
KPH Equestrian
03:13:34 Rapcoon | Jester
nightingale
yep!
The Joker
03:10:44 Ari <3
Hmm ok, I'll keep the manchado for now - his name sake has frosted grey hair so I may change my mind later πŸ˜†

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Transformers Acres
03:31:35 Geek, Eek
My spotify traumatized me. :(
Wolf Dancer
03:31:28 Wolf Burger (Leg)
KPH
xD I'm so excited to learn from him!
KPH Equestrian
03:30:48 Rapcoon | Jester
awww<3
he seems delightful, I love his lil description lol
Wolf Dancer
03:26:58 Wolf Burger (Leg)
He's more filled out/muscular lol
Wolf Dancer
03:26:23 Wolf Burger (Leg)
KPH
Yup! Except he looks more chunky since that photo lol
KPH Equestrian
03:25:36 Rapcoon | Jester
wilf
xD
Cedar? He's so stinking cute omg
Wolf Dancer
03:24:19 Wolf Burger (Leg)
KPH
xD That's why he put me through a test xD Last week he stepped on my boots twice would shift his weight onto and look at me to see how I would react xD He's fun! I know he'll be really great! And here 3rd horse down! -Click-
KPH Equestrian
03:21:39 Rapcoon | Jester
well the smart ones are more fun, they keep you on your toes xD
KPH Equestrian
03:21:00 Rapcoon | Jester
wilf
omg my mother has a video of me when I was 4 trying to get on our shetland pony bareback... I failed and he did that exact thing🀦‍β™€οΈπŸ˜‚
Wolf Dancer
03:20:22 Wolf Burger (Leg)
He's very smart, and playful xD He's a little too smart for his own good xD
KPH Equestrian
03:20:14 Rapcoon | Jester
wilf
oh yay! I'm gonna need pics of himπŸ‘€πŸ˜…
Wolf Dancer
03:19:57 Wolf Burger (Leg)
I was just grooming him before tacking and he just reached over and bit my butt for no reason then looked at me like he didn't do it xD
Minerva
03:19:53 Min
Easiest way is to breed her to another apricot, but anything with at least one e extension gene (ideally chestnut base- ee), at least one Prl gene and 1 or 0 cream genes
Wolf Dancer
03:19:15 Wolf Burger (Leg)
KPH
I also will be able to go out 3 days a week to work with him! I'm so excited about this! He's so stubborn and I love it! Except for the part where he bit me on the butt xD
KPH Equestrian
03:18:23 Rapcoon | Jester
oh wilf that's so exciting!! 😁
Thornwood Manor
03:16:56 
What do I need to get another apricot from her?
-HEE Click-
Wolf Dancer
03:14:50 Wolf Burger (Leg)
KPH
You know the mustang I'm working with? He did a lot better with me today! I didn't have to use the crop, and he gave into the trot/canter more willingly! He only crow hopped a couple of times, which was much better than the last time I rode him! I think I passed the testing stage with him and we have started a relationship! I'm super excited we have so much to learn from each other!
Nightingales Ridge
03:14:18 
OK cool beans thank you!
KPH Equestrian
03:13:34 Rapcoon | Jester
nightingale
yep!
The Joker
03:10:44 Ari <3
Hmm ok, I'll keep the manchado for now - his name sake has frosted grey hair so I may change my mind later πŸ˜†

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   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


Rivendell Steeds
 
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Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


FirstLightFarms

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Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

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