oh that's line editing, athena, when you appraoch each individual line and word. usually when a story is in the earlier drafts you want to do developmental editing, where you're critiquing the bigger picture stuff (plot, pacing, character development, etc). Line/proofreading comes last
I can be gentler lol I just might miss some things. I also like to color code when editing. Ex. everything marked in blue is punctuation, everything marked in green is word choice
Color: Brown Dun Tobiano Frame Horse Nbr: 12434408 Breed: Sport Horse Sex: Mare Birthdate: January 1, 2017 Age: Deceased Birth Year: 90 Height: 16.3 Hands
Horse is Rated: Dressage: Elite Cross Country: Superb Show Jumping: Superb
Color Rarity: 1 of 48
Achievements Championship Shows: 0 Total Winnings: 4,431 Total Points: 2 Yearly Winnings: 0 Yearly Points: 0 Total Profit: 0 Recent Placings: 0 ~ 0 ~ 0 ~ 0 Total Fed Points: 0
Managed Show Days
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Name: Clung Age: 0 Mare Color: Brown Dun Tobiano Splash White Sabino Rabicano Appaloosa Breed: Sport Horse Foal Rating: E/A/Sub Bravery Rating: Sub-Par
If you have Dapple Blend Grain, you can feed it to your horse and their coat will dapple.
The effect will wear off after a few days. One pound of grain will be fed at a time.
If you feed Senior Blend to your senior horse they will have a 10% decreased chance in dying
when the weekly script runs on Monday morning. The effect lasts for one weekly cycle.
You have no available Level 7 riders.
You can hire a rider. They will be automatically assigned to your horse. Be sure to visit the Rider's Lounge and pay them.
Set Breeding Requirements for your horse. Enter the minimum rating allowable for breeding. When breeding, Any combo of the entered values and higher will be accepted. Leave blank to set to None.
Edit your horse's remarks. Keep all content PG-13.
Choose a Background for your horse.
Withdraw your horse from it's team. You will lose all team points for this horse. Please discuss this action with the team manager first.
Your horse may show 3 times per week. Shows run daily. Your horse and rider will gain valuable experience from showing. Select a discipline to show in, or scratch from tonight's show.
Your horse has shown 0 times this week.
A rider must be assigned to your horse before you can enter shows!
If you would like to put your horse on the market for breeding, click below. Note that when your horse is up for breeding, anyone may breed to them. Also note that you don't need to enter a price when marking a stallion available for straws.
If you want this horse to have a special price for club members, feel free to add it, otherwise
leave those two fields blank.
This horse has been Bred this Year and can breed again next Game Year.
This will mark a Mare's Brood as Reserved.
It is cosmetic only and will not prevent this Mare from being bred.
This Reservation will be identified in the Breeding Center.
Choose a file to upload as your horse image. Pictures should be no larger than max 500 width and 500 height. Only file types of jpg, gif, or png will be accepted, however file size cannot be greater than 100K, So most likely you will need to save
the file as jpg. IMPORTANT ! Images stolen off the internet are not ok to use.
Please follow the crediting rules located here: Link If you are having trouble getting your images uploaded, here is a forum topic to help: Link
Upload A Horse Image
Enter a new name for your horse.
Choose the discipline to train your horse in. Your horse will train slower if trained in all sports at once, than if trained in one specialty at a time.
Enter the sale price for your horse. Please be aware that if you put a horse up for public
sale, anyone may purchase it.
If you no longer wish to own this horse, you may set them free to fend for themselves. The Karma Fairy will pay you 1000 for your adult horse, up to 100 horses per month. 100 to go! The Karma Fairy will pay you 200 Credits for all of your adult horses. The Karma Fairy will pay you zero for your yearling. This action is not reversible so be sure before you click Submit !
Move your horse to another barn or pasture.
Join A Federation. Your horse will accrue Federation Points
and based on that may make the Federation Championships.
It costs 500 to enter a Federation and membership lasts
one game year.
Reroll your horse's image. Your horse's genes will stay the same, but their markings and patterns will be randomly regenerated.
Rerolls remaining: 175
Genetic Test this horse to view their coat genes. It costs 5000 ebs to genetically test this horse.
Warming, with Sleet and Heavy Icing
