Moonrose Magic
10:36:14 🎀 Diva
you can also use hot water bottle, heat hepls
Moonrose Magic
10:35:35 🎀 Diva
i suffered quite a few utis after my cyst was cut, cranberry juice and even tea does help, also warm lemon water, it will make you pee more, but it will flush out faster, also make sure you drink at least 9 glasses of water until your pee pretty much has water colour
Gypsy Family Farm
10:31:33 
Cranberry juice is supposed to help.
Revel Ranch
10:30:05 Hummer
That is the reason I was up all night because I am going to be bathroom at least once an hour.
Glacier Bay Cove
10:28:43 Angel Cats
I had one of those years ago and it's not fun at all, speaking from personal experience
Gypsy Family Farm
10:28:20 
Oh suuuuck! I am SO sorry!
Revel Ranch
10:27:27 Hummer
@Gyspy, I think it is a UTI. =\
Gypsy Family Farm
10:25:43 
@Hummer; oh no! Is it like a flu, or something else? Also how is your burn?
Revel Ranch
10:24:57 Hummer
@Gypsy, what sucks is I went to the doctor yesterday, but they said they wonÂ’t get test results to me until tomorrow so I am just miserable without meds waiting to see what is wrong.
Gypsy Family Farm
10:22:49 
I'm sick too, Hummer. Drink lots of fluids and rest as much as you can. <3
Fossil's Dreams
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happy Birthday Rein!
Merry Christmas to all!
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10:18:32 DD
Hummer, That's awful! I hope things take a turn for the better <3
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Sorry to hear that, Hummer. Hope things get better for you
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Thus far my Christmas is off to a rough start because I didnÂ’t sleep at all last night due to being ill. I am so tired I want to cry.
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Merry Christmas
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Merry Christmas <3
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merry happy holidays :)
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   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


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Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


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Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

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