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40 horses for auction, pretty cheap and 500ebs bid increment
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MakeEm Fancy
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I also have EWE RID mares for 70k and EEE RID mares for 15k. Feel free to offer.
Peacock Estate
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Palais de Lys
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EEE RID colt.
Merryland Farm
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pandemoniu_m
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Cheap quality I/SH including:
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Sunfeather Stables
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Cool looking WB filly for sale!
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She Craves Genesis
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EWE Chestnut Tobiano filly . Wk4 + tracked. 30k

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Fluffy's Cosy Home
01:58:57 Fluffy
Auction:
*World Class
*EEE
*PEE combo
*Colour
*Chimera
*Rares
-HEE Click-

I have:
*WWW/WW Straws
*Studs
*Items in my store
*Decors
*Sale horses
-HEE Click-
Cynical Stables
01:36:33 
40 horses for auction, pretty cheap and 500ebs bid increment
-HEE Click-
MakeEm Fancy
01:07:30 Ally 💜
WPP KNN mare
-HEE Click-
Skyrim
12:40:36 Wynter/Ghostly
-HEE Click-
6 year old WWE rated RID stallion for sale at 300k or offer. Has produced EWE's and EEE's.

I also have EWE RID mares for 70k and EEE RID mares for 15k. Feel free to offer.
Peacock Estate
12:38:28 Lily
Peacock appy auction, I/SH!
-HEE Click-
Palais de Lys
12:31:11 
-HEE Click-
EEE RID colt.
Merryland Farm
12:30:45 Merry
Two premade mini sets available for 25k each - Tier 2 art at Tier 4 prices!! -HEE Click-
pandemoniu_m
12:15:24 pheezy
-HEE Click-

Cheap quality I/SH including:
EEE Colts
PEW Mare
PEE-W Dunskin Mare
etc
Sunfeather Stables
12:11:30 SF / Sunfeather
Cool looking WB filly for sale!
-HEE Click-
She Craves Genesis
11:54:35 pheezy 2
-HEE Click-

EWE Chestnut Tobiano filly . Wk4 + tracked. 30k

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Forums > Rider's Lounge > Writer's Nook
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I'm Writing a Thing December 18, 2020 04:39 PM


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Pandora Creek said:

If the other workers are acting like this is normal and she's surprised maybe make this her first week on the job? Also if there's an elevator but no warning not to take it maybe taking the elevator is a test for people? Also how does the murderer leave if the body slumps right as it opens on the third floor?

Some of your word choices made me have to reread the sentence but it's pretty good. "too-late paramedics" feels particularly clumsy in the sentence.



The idea is that she's kind of isolated from what's going on (doesn't really pay much attention to the news, etc) and the behavior that's been spreading has been kind of normalized violence, justified by "laziness". She's not aware of it. I haven't figured out much of her backstory yet, but the fact that using elevators is generally frowned on (and in her place of work, responsible resource use is especially important) might contribute to why she hasn't witnessed this before.
And I never said which floor the elevator started from xD
Yep! This is only a first draft, I'll look into changing that sentence.

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