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MANIA
03:51:16 
i loveeee that pattern on black coats too oml. it just looks so good
ZequineZ
03:50:36 ZEZ - ZZ
Ooo I caught a black colt like that in capture day, looks so pretty on the chestnut
MANIA
03:48:26 
wow look at this stunner i just pulled
-HEE Click-
Alpine Acres
03:09:58 Lily
sure thing! PM me :)
MK Sport Horse Yard
03:08:30 
That would be great and yikes that is a lot to set free!
ZequineZ
02:53:33 ZEZ - ZZ
My current 3 quests 😂
set free 100 horses
Set free 200 horses
Set free 300 horses
Alpine Acres
02:45:43 Lily
MK
I'd be happy to help :)
MK Sport Horse Yard
02:28:03 
Can someone help me narrow my herd? I did that capture quest and now I'm swamped :(
Gypsy Family Farm
02:13:03 
She's STUNNING!
Moonpaw Magic
01:54:33 Diva's pawsickles
Manchies are purdy
-HEE Click-
Golden Heart
01:50:59 Gold
ignore the horrendous spelling 0_0
Golden Heart
01:50:33 Gold
Im severly contemplating getting premioum xD

BUT, just becouse school starts in a month and i dont wanna buy a membership just to barely use it lol
Dash and Duchess
01:48:10 DD | ~Squizard~
I agree with diva! premium is incredibly worth it <3
Mooncreek Magic
01:44:13 Diva's fruits
Instead of item, get a premium. It will help you more
Wild Wind Stables
01:39:13 Wind
*Match her stats

I enjoy the challenge though!
Wild Wind Stables
01:38:46 Wind
WB and X. I'm trying to do patterns and rating simultaneously so it's been a little hard to find stallions who have the right coat, catch her stats, have good ratings, and have a breeding requirement under EEE
MK Sport Horse Yard
01:38:28 
Can we crossbreed on here?
Mooncreek Magic
01:35:15 Diva's fruits
What breed you do ?
Mooncreek Magic
01:33:26 Diva's fruits
Exactly
Wild Wind Stables
01:32:17 Wind
A strong producer means generally giving foals with the same or better rating than herself?

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MANIA
03:51:16 
i loveeee that pattern on black coats too oml. it just looks so good
ZequineZ
03:50:36 ZEZ - ZZ
Ooo I caught a black colt like that in capture day, looks so pretty on the chestnut
MANIA
03:48:26 
wow look at this stunner i just pulled
-HEE Click-
Alpine Acres
03:09:58 Lily
sure thing! PM me :)
MK Sport Horse Yard
03:08:30 
That would be great and yikes that is a lot to set free!
ZequineZ
02:53:33 ZEZ - ZZ
My current 3 quests 😂
set free 100 horses
Set free 200 horses
Set free 300 horses
Alpine Acres
02:45:43 Lily
MK
I'd be happy to help :)
MK Sport Horse Yard
02:28:03 
Can someone help me narrow my herd? I did that capture quest and now I'm swamped :(
Gypsy Family Farm
02:13:03 
She's STUNNING!
Moonpaw Magic
01:54:33 Diva's pawsickles
Manchies are purdy
-HEE Click-
Golden Heart
01:50:59 Gold
ignore the horrendous spelling 0_0
Golden Heart
01:50:33 Gold
Im severly contemplating getting premioum xD

BUT, just becouse school starts in a month and i dont wanna buy a membership just to barely use it lol
Dash and Duchess
01:48:10 DD | ~Squizard~
I agree with diva! premium is incredibly worth it <3
Mooncreek Magic
01:44:13 Diva's fruits
Instead of item, get a premium. It will help you more
Wild Wind Stables
01:39:13 Wind
*Match her stats

I enjoy the challenge though!
Wild Wind Stables
01:38:46 Wind
WB and X. I'm trying to do patterns and rating simultaneously so it's been a little hard to find stallions who have the right coat, catch her stats, have good ratings, and have a breeding requirement under EEE
MK Sport Horse Yard
01:38:28 
Can we crossbreed on here?
Mooncreek Magic
01:35:15 Diva's fruits
What breed you do ?
Mooncreek Magic
01:33:26 Diva's fruits
Exactly
Wild Wind Stables
01:32:17 Wind
A strong producer means generally giving foals with the same or better rating than herself?

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   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


Rivendell Steeds
 
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Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


FirstLightFarms

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Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

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