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Heart of the Phoenix said:
Stormsong Manor said:
You switch tenses quite often, from past tense to present.
is that a bad thing? cause i really dont know....
Switching tenses (especially if it happens frequently and without a clear reason) can really throw your reader off. One book I read was in past tense for about half the book and then switched to present tense without warning or reason. I was completely jolted out of the book and could not get back "in" to the story no matter how hard I tried. I write a lot and I tend to use first person present tense. So when I'm trying to write something outside of my normal writing style I sometimes end up swapping tenses and having to go back and correct it. It's not that big of a deal, just make sure you establish consistency- if you are going to switch, there should also be a difference in either the character speaking or the setting they're in- like flashbacks. If you ever need someone to just go over your writing and do minor corrections, I'd be happy to help! |
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TenaciTea said:
Heart of the Phoenix said:
Stormsong Manor said:
You switch tenses quite often, from past tense to present.
is that a bad thing? cause i really dont know....
Switching tenses (especially if it happens frequently and without a clear reason) can really throw your reader off. One book I read was in past tense for about half the book and then switched to present tense without warning or reason. I was completely jolted out of the book and could not get back "in" to the story no matter how hard I tried. I write a lot and I tend to use first person present tense. So when I'm trying to write something outside of my normal writing style I sometimes end up swapping tenses and having to go back and correct it. It's not that big of a deal, just make sure you establish consistency- if you are going to switch, there should also be a difference in either the character speaking or the setting they're in- like flashbacks. If you ever need someone to just go over your writing and do minor corrections, I'd be happy to help!
ok, thank you. I've been thinking about going through and changing it to first-person. |
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Oh I meant switching between past tense "Said/did/___ed" and present tense "says/does/___s". Though switching between first and third person can also be disorienting lol |
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TenaciTea said:
Oh I meant switching between past tense "Said/did/___ed" and present tense "says/does/___s". Though switching between first and third person can also be disorienting lol
yeah, i understand, but i'm thinking about changing the entire book, well except the prologue, to first person. |
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I just found your story yesterday and binge-read everything lmao, needless to say I really like it. I don't know much good boy names, But maybe Alvaro? (Also- can I make fanart of Aurora xD) |
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CanterWood Equestria said:
I just found your story yesterday and binge-read everything lmao, need to say I really like it. I don't know much good boy names, But maybe Alvaro? (Also- can I make fanart of Aurora xD)
Yessssss! I love Alvaro! And yes you can make fanart of Aurora and Alvaro if you want. I will be adding his description too. |
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Ancient Tech said:
The book is great!
Aww.... Thanks, i have a few ideas I'ld like to bounce off some people to find out if they would give the book a little more mystery and flare, or if they would just clutter the book. |
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New character / elite! Name: Anoki Gender: female Appearance: tan skin and dark brown hair, hazel eyes. 4'6, gets teased about her height. White wings, sort of like hawk wings. 22 years old, has CIP (Cognitive Insensitivity to Pain) oh yeah, deer legs! Behavior: nervous but clumsy, has a massive fear of fire. Hope yah like her! It's ok if you don't choose her, just thought I'd give it a try. |
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I might have a picture of Alex, if I can find it. It's on paper, though. Can't do sh*t worth of digital. |
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